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Critique By:
Angelo Villaschi (K:49617)
3/15/2004 5:58:15 AM
Hi Dennis,
No one has yet commented on this, so here's my twopence worth...
I like the "connection" between the two subjects, the way they are looking at each other. I think this shot has great potential. There are a lot of details that give clues to the story behind the photo. The different t-shirts, for a start.
I have a suspicion that if the boys' hands were in the shot it would make for a massive improvement --- since they are not looking at the camera. This could be either by using the camera in portrait position (perhaps stepping back a bit or using a wider angle lens) or by waiting for some gesticulation.
Also, I find my eyes quite distracted by some of the items in the periphery of the shot: tre frame of the car, the contents of the boot, the dashboard in the background (those two dials look like a pair of eyes, and they are right in the line of sight between the two boys --- if they weren't there, it would be easier to just wander from one face to the other, connecting more with the models).
Here's what I would try: wider angle lens, portrait mode, get in closer and try to connect more with the subjects.
Of course, it is all too easy to say that now: I'm not sure if you knew the models or was that intimate with them.
Best regards,
Angelo.
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Critique By:
Angelo Villaschi (K:49617)
3/15/2004 5:39:48 AM
Dennis,
You need to use Photoshop's Unsharp Mask on Photo CDs to recover some of the sharpness. If you have Photoshop, try playing around with this function.
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Critique By:
Joshua Rainey (K:5069)
2/10/2004 11:51:26 AM
Very nice shot...
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Critique By:
Russell Becnel (K:564)
5/14/2003 8:07:06 PM
Great scenery! The colors are bright & vivid. Very well done
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Critique By:
Jose Ignacio (Nacho) Garcia Barcia (K:96391)
5/9/2003 7:21:40 PM
marvelous image.nice composition.you may look beauty in the nature.Cuba.nacho
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Critique By:
DENNIS CARPENTER JONES (K:74)
5/9/2003 11:47:30 AM
LIM CH, THANKS FOR THE HELP, BUT WOULD YOU BELEIVE THAT MY ORIGINALS IS A LOT CLEARER AND SHARPER, AND IF YOU SEE MY OTHER PICTURE ART AT NIGHT IT IS THE SAME WAY, THE PLACE PHOTO LAB THAT PUT THESE PHOTOS ON CD'S DID MY PICTURES LIKE THIS. I USED A TRIPOD AND A CABLE RELEASE FOR THE LONG EXPOSURE. BUT ONCE AGAIN THANKS, I LIKE YOUR WORK AND I WILL BE IN TOUCH.
DENNIS C. JONES
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Critique By:
LIM CH (K:1605)
5/8/2003 11:04:14 AM
good long exposure. image could be sharper
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Critique By:
Mário Sousa (K:16985)
4/20/2003 4:54:29 AM
very good
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Critique By:
Aiman Nassar (K:11961)
4/18/2003 4:27:03 PM
Beautiful night shot Dennis... very nice composition.. and color contrast
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Critique By:
Mark Peterson (K:3452)
3/14/2003 2:00:56 AM
The flower looks good, but IMO maybe some cropping.
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Critique By:
Aaron Gustwiller (K:171)
12/16/2002 8:00:43 PM
I have done long exposures while on bridges over I-75. If this image I would try vertical instead of horizontal because you have a lot of vertical lines with the light poles and buildings in the background that you would be able to fit into the frame then. The bright light is a little distracting from the rest of the image and getting a vertical composition will hopefully rid of that light and gain more to the picture with the buildings and light poles.
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Critique By:
Danny Provost (K:812)
10/25/2002 3:50:11 PM
Dennis, this must have been taken at the 28 end of the lens as you can see the filter on the top corners. I do like the aperture star on the sun.
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Critique By:
Vincent K. Tylor (K:7863)
10/15/2002 2:43:53 PM
Nice shot. I have always been a Redskins fan. The ran this guy out of town two years ago...and he made them pay (ran a kickoff back for a TD). A great player with a very colorful personality and a nice shot.
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Critique By:
Marc Robin (K:3385)
10/10/2002 5:52:10 PM
You've caught some nice lighting on the fathers in front of the water falls. I can't help but feel that they should be more important in the image. Cropping down close, or actually moving closer to them (to me) would feel better. I'm an amateur though, so take my opinion with a grain of salt!
Cheers, Marc
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Critique By:
Koen B (K:3279)
6/12/2002 4:19:22 AM
I think that white building in the background should be sharp at least - especially since it is supposed to be the main subject.
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Critique By:
Koen B (K:3279)
6/11/2002 2:54:00 PM
This flower really pops out of the background. This is probably because it is the only thing in focus, but it also has warm colours while the background is cool. This is a good thing, I think. But the flower is drifting a bit in the background, there is too much of this background. It also is not positioned very well I think. Maybe you could experiment with cutting away parts of the photo to get a more dynamic composition ?
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Critique By:
Daniel L Quigley-Skillin (K:1383)
3/3/2002 1:01:29 PM
You have a great idea here. Forgive me for not remembering where I read it, but for moon shots, with 400 film the exposure time is somewhere around 3 to 4 seconds. If stars are in the shot, they can drift after about two seconds.
Overall, nice shot 
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Critique By:
al shaikh (K:15790)
1/24/2002 10:22:02 AM
Dennis this effect really works well when you have some curves in the road. Have you shot much more of these?
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Critique By:
Deleted User (K:4598)
11/26/2001 5:00:04 PM
Very good lines and lighting. Well done.
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Critique By:
Former Member (K:2712)
11/26/2001 12:17:36 PM
Dennis, I like this the lines all seem to draw you to the center of the picture.
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Critique By:
David Meiland (K:1820)
10/12/2001 11:26:21 PM
Can't tell if it's camera shake--the traffic barriers in the foreground seem sharp and the bridge in the background top center looks OK too... but something was moving, possibly just vibration of the tarmac and wind from the passing cars...? Cool shot, would like to see it a bit cleaner.
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Critique By:
Debbie Groff (K:9569)
8/29/2001 9:30:08 PM
Looks a HELL of a lot better than the one I got. (Did I just say that? Granny's cussin!) Anyhooo...Dennis, ya wanna borrow Paul's telescope. Go checkout image no. 5170
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Critique By:
DENNIS CARPENTER JONES (K:74)
8/31/2001 12:30:25 PM
Somtimes you use what you got when the situation arrives, and do the best that you can do, with what you got THANK YOU VERY MUCH, Mr. Gary.
Critique? I do not mind being ctiticized, Mr. Gary, I just responded to what you said, now can you take critisim, no harm, huh. I thank you 4-what you said and that's that. I stll want you tell give me advice. Please accept my apology if you feel that I was being sarcastic.
Dennis c.
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Critique By:
Paul Groff (K:10)
8/26/2001 8:53:09 AM
I love how you captured the clouds. The one on my page was exposed for 4 seconds using fuji 400 slide.I didnt get as much cloud light or moon detail.Keep looking UP.
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Critique By:
Martin Mora (K:4666)
8/26/2001 7:47:57 AM
Glad to help Dave, probably best to bracket a roll of shots to get that nice crisp moon shot,, I was just looking through paul Groffs folio, and he has some nice ones, he might give us a hinst as to what shutter speeds he used, but Im sure it was around 125th at F8 or F11 with 100 iso I have a roll of them in my negative files, that I could use for sandwiching negs together
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Critique By:
Dave Holland (K:13074)
8/26/2001 7:19:51 AM
Actually, Marty, I am grateful that you did jump in, since I didn't have any idea how long a moon exposure should be. I knew I had been overexposing a lot, but I didn't think by a log factor. Your further comments are timely as well. The simplest solution would be two exposures, later spliced together electronically.
On re-reading my comment, what I said was that I didn't think celestial motion was rapid enough to show a noticeable movement of the moon in ten seconds. Evidently it is. We are really moving!
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Critique By:
Martin Mora (K:4666)
8/26/2001 6:44:12 AM
Dear DC
Hi, so glad you dropped me a note, and those comments were not so much for
yuo, but for someone eles that commented, and said something about a 10 second
exposure not seeming like enough, so thought Id jump in and explain moon
exposure, as I had done some long ago, the trouble your going to run into is with that
quick exposure, you will indeed get a sharp detailed moon, but your not going to get
those awsome looking clouds, thats one thing your long exposure is picking up...a
quandry indeed, so how to get this same photo with a sharp moon?? Im not sure you
can, would have to be double exposed,, or the sharp moon photoshopped in, but I
do love what you have done, many nights Iv seen that same scene, and wondered
how to pull it off,
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Critique By:
Deleted User (K:6775)
8/26/2001 3:22:39 AM
Hi Dennis *smile*...not living in the US I probably wont get the opportunity to see your first issue but at least I get to see your photographs in here. I would just make a little crop on the left side of this one...just enough to take off those black bits at the middle and top of the left border. You said you wanted to the picture taken this way...did you also want the buildings leaning like they are. If not...someone a long time ago told me if you make sure the verticle line closest to the centre of your photograph is straight it will make the buildings not have this leaning appearance so much....keep posting...*smile* Maggie
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Critique By:
Martin Mora (K:4666)
8/25/2001 1:40:18 PM
I dont have the book here with me, but a good moon shot, if I remember right is around 125th at F8 to show a detailed moon, the reason this is oblong, is cause the exposure is to long, and the moon moved through the frame, also no detail in the moon for the same reason, moon is brighter than one would think, the meter is fooled by all the black sky taking up the metering of the frame..
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Critique By:
Dave Holland (K:13074)
8/25/2001 11:59:15 AM
The moon in all three of these shots is somehow oblong. I have seen that in some of my shots as well, especially if I use an extender to try and get more magnification... Ten seconds seems too short for this to be due to celestial motion. Is there astygmatism of the lens elements?
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